In Gory surroundings many flowers were crushed
By devilish hands many innocent lives hushed
Teeming with dreams their heads were
Proud they were of their lands
Optimistic:facing monsters no fear
they had:thing or two their hands
and hearts could teach us:
A tale of vengeance has begun thus
The blood that coursed their veins
was ours:stained soil shall remind
us of war waged with whimsical gains
of torture ushered from behind
The vale screams in agony
chanting against demons
of our making:tireless tyranny
never ceases:Hark!Humans
The screams of mothers haunt my sleep
The countless corpses slaughtered like sheep
Is this the people representing us
Ah!No they are the tumor we
refuse to be rid of!Their curse
vile threatens to intoxicate thee
and all:Steer clear we need of the storm
and learn lessons b’fore all they deform
Very sad reality soulfully portrayed…
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Thank you.You can criticise the shortomings though.Whenever you feel they are there.Greatly appreciate you reading it.☺
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MM, I am very positive, I am not a critic (hate the lot 🙂 ) I will respond whenever I can otherwise you will see me liking your posts all the time 😀
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😀No,silly.I mean by criticism on composition!I need it as I wish to write professionally and I was asking you to offer your expertise where ever you feel it is needed.
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Can’t do on composition, wrong person as I heardly do form poetry, and being an absolute know nothing amateur I am not a good mentor my dear friend 😀
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Okay.But you are a good friend and can shed some objective light on what I write..☺That is enough😀
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Sure, I will try MM 😀
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